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They speak to me, spilling your secrets, opening your soul.
There's nothing you can hide in your beautiful eyes,
As golden and magical as the morning sunrise.

They're a kaleidoscope of emotion.
Whispers of unwritten stories in each little fleck of green,
Murmuring tales of broken hearts, visits to the between.

The depth of your pain, your albatross
Spins in those eyes, plunging down, down, fathomless;
Yet, they sparkle at a distance, boundless, fearless.

I drown in those eyes, listening eagerly to the stories.
I am lost in your ageless soul...
#80 in 100 Themes, "Kaleidoscope".
I'm a bit worried about the conclusion, but otherwise happy with it.
Somewhat influenced by Jason Mraz's 'I Won't Give Up'. (:
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Avix215 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow this is great! :D
I'm not really sure what 'albatross' was doing in there, but whatever. :P
I like 'Whispers of unwritten stories in each little fleck of green' :D
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!

And albatross is a figurative term meaning burden.

It came from some old, old poem... but I got it from some book where one chick kept telling her best friend that her virginity was her 'albatross' and that she needed to get rid of it :P xD
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Avix215 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Old English is weird. :P
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Eh. somewhat. :P
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Avix215 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:P
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WhiteWolf614 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I don't usually like poetry like this. I say that a lot here on dA, but I was quite drawn into your rhythm here. Usually I prefer darker poetry, but the flow of this had me impressed :D
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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WhiteWolf614 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No problem, I love reading people's work :)
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Aqua-Breeze Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ending took my breath away. I am speechless!
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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Aqua-Breeze Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
np!!! :)
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Forgotten-Heir Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Professional Writer
First things first, this is an amazing poetic piece and flowed really easily off my tongue as I read it. 10/10!
About the conclusion, I see no problem with it. It leave it open enough that if you wish to; you could add more at a later date, but it also says enough that you could indeed leave it as is and it'll be fine as that.
A well earned favorite! I shall be checking your other works out. :)
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! It means the world to me :)
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Forgotten-Heir Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Professional Writer
You are a very talented Poet! :D
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!! :D
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zinnazay Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist
This is so beautiful :iconimhighplz:
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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zinnazay Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist
no problem,
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WriteByNumbers Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, how lovely! ^3^
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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WriteByNumbers Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome! :D
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sarastallet99 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Student General Artist
Really great work! :D
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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FrannyKawaii Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I like it. It's good. :heart:
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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kellseer Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Professional Writer
It's good. I like the reference to the Mariner's Rhyme.
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :)
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