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Once upon a dream there was a boy
who whispered metaphors into his blankets
in the dead of the night. he pǝuɹnʇ them
over and twisted them and s t r e t c h e d them
searching for the melody that would define him.

what he didn't know is that his ears were traitors;
they rejected every rhyme without a trace of shame
and never allowed him to realize that his melodies
were real music, were beauty and love woven
into delicate threads; he only heard cacophony.

night after night he struggled and agonized
never satisfied with any combination of notes
always concluding that he was inferior to the world.

on the other side of the fence, close and far away
a girl with with stars in her eyes cried; her tears
were of the purest silver, the plainest pain.
she cried for verses lost to the valley of her strife
for missed opportunities and bro/ken hearts of iron.

their paths strayed along the leafy jungle of time
l i t t e r e d with normalities. she laughed and he smiled
and few souls knew the existence of her shining tears
or the music of the melodies he composed.

but Fate had other plans; she cackled as she stitched
a pattern that would c-o-n-n-e-c-t their paths, 
a pattern that would allow her to hear his music
a pattern that would allow him to read her verses
to collect them from the depths of her struggles.

so here she is, a girl with stars in her eyes
writing a clumsy verse rescued from her spirit
to tell a boy who is afraid of the world
that the metaphors, the melodies of his soul
are beautiful.

I wrote this a long, long, long time ago.

EDIT 1 - did some more formatting. :D
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NerdyElmo Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
So....... i dont know alluring deep stunning! 

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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! Sorry for the late reply, I've been inactive for a while :/
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Lothrian Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Woahh! That is stunning! You really have a talent.
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so sorry for such a late reply, I rarely check my dA these days.
Anyway, thank you so much for taking the time to comment. :) It means a lot!
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roadkillKitten Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
This is very moving. I think, as "artists" we all feel this way at times (or all the time). We tend to take more things "to heart" and examine them at length, and I think this piece portrays that very well. Nicely done, my friend.
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :)
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roadkillKitten Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012
Always my pleasure, dearie.
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DragonTamerDave Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is good.

AWESOME
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much!
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DragonTamerDave Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome
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loverofmythology Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow, this is so great! i could actually imagine a scene in my head! and i really liked the format too :)
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much!
What did you imagine, if I might ask? Curious ;)
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loverofmythology Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
a boy sort of snuggled up in wool blankets (the ones with the silk edges) crying, and the view from his first floor window to a grassy yard lines with a white picket fence. a girl is sitting on the ground leaning up against it on the other side with her knees pulled up to her chest, also crying. his window is open, but neither of them can hear the other one's cries. the sky is black and littered with stars, and streetlights faintly line the sidewalks.
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
YES! Very similar to what I was imagining. Thank you so much! :D
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loverofmythology Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
oh my god really!?!? i never thought i'd actually get close to what an artist imagined when they did a poem or a story!! i feel special now XD
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:XD:
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SereneCyrene Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Student General Artist
Hello again. Your poem has been featured here: [link] :)
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :)
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BeautifulAdmiration Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, that was awesome!
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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BeautifulAdmiration Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Np. :)
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Me2Smart4U Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Student Digital Artist
This poem is strong and very powerful... I deeply feel the true emotions expressed...
This very well written piece... I enjoyed the creative flow of words
AWESOME Job :clap:
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :)
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Me2Smart4U Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Student Digital Artist
most welcome:hug:
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SereneCyrene Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Student General Artist
I love this! So well-written. :dalove:
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :huggle:
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EwaGladka Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
One of the worst things is when good artists are insecure, while the awful artists think that their work is beautiful (I don't say it about any specific person, it's just my overall thought).
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I agree. Another thing that's just as bad is when wonderful people are insecure about themselves.
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EwaGladka Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed.
It made me remember about one quote (unfortunately I don't remember who said/wrote it): "The worst thing on the world is that smart people are full of doubts, while fools don't have them".
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ooh, that's vaguely familiar... but I can't remember who said it either T_T
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RoboHamsterz Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012
oh my gosh i love it !
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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RoboHamsterz Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012
^^ np
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AgiStar Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012   Traditional Artist
This is beautiful, especially that last stanza. It tied it up so nicely.
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, thank you! :)
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AgiStar Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012   Traditional Artist
You're welcomed! ^_^
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Craytato Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow~! :D Loved it^^ good job~!
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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Craytato Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
np^^
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