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Shh, and hear the silent scream
Of the girl you used to be.

12th Sept. 2012 EDIT: Finally extended it! You can find it here: [link]



I thought of this when I was in the shower. xD
I'm not sure why, really. I was actually thinking of poses, for some reason, and I thought of one with a girl with her finger to her mouth, lips only slightly pursed.
And somehow, my train of thought just jumped ahead, like, ten cars and came to this. xD
Should I expand on it? Or should I leave it the way it is? Advice would be greatly appreciated!
I'm going to put this for now as #79 in 100 Themes, 'Quiet'. If I do extend this, then I will replace it witht he extended version.
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Starkpretty Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012
Maybe expand- this is like gold dust.
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I did, and I can see you've read it :D
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Starkpretty Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012
:D Yep, commented and then saw the link >.< oops!

It's lovely in both its forms.
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :D
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Starkpretty Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012
No problem! :D
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SapphiraTheMongoose Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
I personally think it's way too short, like it's quoting something from a bigger piece. Like something you'd post in your signature, not give its own deviation.
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I'm planning on extending it. Actally this was supposed to be the first two lines of a poem, but I got stuck and decided to see if I could make it work on its own.
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brandt2846 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
ĪGaspĪ I used to be a girl!? That explains everything! D:
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crystelclear1104 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
xD
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Grahamcrackersamurai Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Student General Artist
It strikes a cord as-is, if you feel like you should do more I'd love to read it.
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